The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
Sample Response
The given data showshows why the adultsgrownup people continue their studiesstudy and their views on howtheir opinion how the costs of adult educationthe cost of this adult study should be shared. According to the first bar graph, around 40% of adults40% adults decide to study because of their interest in the subjectinterest in studying which is the most influential reason for adults to study. Gaining qualification is another important reason that influences 38% of adultsmore than 35% adult to continue their studies. Job-related reasons contribute to around 20% adult to decide to study while meeting people inspiresinspire 9% of peoplearound 10% people to study. According to the pie chart, the people who have decided to pursue further educationdo the further education think that 40% of these costs40% of this cost should be provided by the individuals who are enrolled in a coursegetting enrolled in the study while 35% of the costs35% cost should be shared by employersby the employer since they are deciding to study to do better in their job position. The remaining 25% of the costsThe remaining 25% cost should be shared by the taxpayers according to these people. In summary, interest in subjects, improving qualification, better job position and improving communication with people are the reasons most adults decide to study and according to them the cost of this study should be shared by individuals, employers and taxpayers.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response reports the cost-sharing chart accurately and identifies the two leading reasons for study. However, its overview is weak and the bar-chart coverage is incomplete, with several distinct reasons omitted or merged into a vague job-related category. The highest-priority improvement is to group and compare all seven reasons accurately before summarising the overall ranking.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The pie-chart figures and leading study reasons are accurate, but the response omits several bar-chart categories and lacks a clear comparative overview.
Cover all seven reasons by grouping the highest, middle, and lowest figures, while keeping each category distinct.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves from the bar chart to the pie chart in a generally logical order, although paragraphing is absent and ideas are sometimes repetitive.
Use separate paragraphs for the overview and each chart, and reduce repeated phrases about adults deciding to study.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for the topic, but repetition and frequent unnatural choices such as 'grownup people' and 'do the further education' limit flexibility.
Use concise academic terms such as 'adults', 'pursue further education', and 'course fees', with more varied reporting verbs.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains generally clear, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, plurals, and sentence construction reduce grammatical control.
Proofread percentage structures and subject-verb agreement, using forms such as '40% of adults' and 'meeting people inspires'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
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