The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
Sample Response
The pie chart below is divided into four different sections and illustratessections, illustrates the main reasons why agricultural land degrades around the world, while the table compares the land degradation across regionsdegradation by regions, including North America, Europe and Oceaniathe Oceania, during the 1990s. The predominant reason for land degradation is over-grazingwould be over-grazing, accounting for 35%taking up a percentage of 35 while deforestation was the second-largest causefell into the second main reason at 30%, five percentage points lowerwith only five percent behind. Over-cultivation is the third major cause of agricultural land degradationcause of the agricultural land to degrade. Each of the three reasons takes up broadly similar sharesroughly the similar equation while the other factors account for onlyother factors only cover 7 percent in the chart. In Europe, the degradation is the worst in comparison to the other two regions, having the majority of the land degraded from the result of deforestation. Oceania had total land degradationhas the total degradation of 13 percent with two main reasons that are responsible for the land degradationresponsible for the less productive agricultural land, including over-grazing and deforestation. Over-cultivation, however, had no effect onhas none effect toward the land in Oceania according to the table. North America has the least degradation in the lands in the table below. It indicates that the only 5% of the land was degradedland degraded in only five percent in the 1990s with the main cause of over-cultivation, accounting for 3.3 percentage points of the 5% totaltaking up the percentage of 3.3 of the total degradation of 5 percent.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a coherent account of both visuals, accurately identifying over-grazing as the leading global cause and Europe as the most affected region. The main limitation is incomplete numerical support, especially the omission of Europe's 23% total, alongside some imprecise wording about deforestation. The highest-priority improvement is to present the three regional totals and their dominant causes with exact, clearly distinguished percentages.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers both visuals and identifies their principal patterns accurately, but omits Europe's total and slightly overstates deforestation's share there.
State that Europe had 23% degraded land and that deforestation was its largest cause at 9.8%, rather than a majority of the total.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report moves logically from global causes to regional comparisons, though some ideas are repetitive and would benefit from clearer paragraph grouping.
Separate the overview from two detail paragraphs, one for the pie chart and one comparing all three regions.
Lexical Resource
Relevant topic vocabulary is used with some variety, but inaccurate expressions such as "similar equation" and "none effect toward" weaken precision.
Use natural phrases such as "similar proportions," "had no effect," and "land was degraded by" consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted and meaning remains clear, but article, agreement, preposition, and sentence-structure errors recur throughout.
Edit each complex sentence for a single clear main clause and correct forms such as "Oceania" and "had no effect on the land."
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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