The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
Sample Response
The given table depicts some striking information according to the statistics of the United Nations which represents social and economic indicators of four particular countries in the year 1994. According to the provided table, the table showsit can be seen clearly that the livingthat, living standards of Canadian and Japanese citizens were far better than those of people in Peru and Zairethat of people of Peru and Zaire.
As is presented in the table, Deleteinitially, annual incomes of Canadian and Japanese people were much higher, atmuch higher with $11,100 and $15,76011100 and 15760 USD per person in 1994 while people of Peru and Zaire had only $160 and $130260 and 130 USD per person respectively. In addition, life expectancy at birth in Canada and Japan was 76 and 78 years whereas it was only 51 and 4751 and 47 only in Peru and Zaire. As is observed from the given data, daily calorie supply in Canada and Japan was 3326 and 2846 per person while the corresponding figuresthis ratio in Peru and Zaire was considerably loweralmost half, with 1927 and 1749 per person. Again, the adult literacy rate in both Canada and Japan was exactly the same at 99%was exactly same - 99%, while the other twowhile other two countries, namely Peru and Zaire,countries namely Peru and Zaire had far lowerless adult literacy rates which were 68 and 34 percentpercents respectively.
In summary, citizens of Canada and Japan had considerablyincredibly better living standards than those in Peru and Zairethan that of Peru and Zaire across all four indicatorsin all indicated areas in the statistics.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overall comparison and systematically reports every indicator, making the contrast between Canada and Japan and the two lower-performing countries easy to follow. Its main weakness is precision: Peru's annual income is misstated as $260 rather than $160, and some phrasing is awkward or repetitive. Prioritise exact data checking and more natural comparative language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and comparisons cover all four indicators effectively, with one notable factual error in Peru's annual income.
Verify every figure against the table, especially Peru's income of $160, while preserving the strong cross-country comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organised around a clear overview, a detailed comparative paragraph, and a concise conclusion.
Reduce repetitive framing such as “As is presented” and “As is observed” to make progression more natural.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied and generally appropriate, although terms such as “ratio,” “percents,” and “incredibly” are imprecise here.
Use exact academic phrasing such as “calorie supply,” “percent,” and “substantially higher living standards.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex comparative sentences are handled successfully overall, but agreement, article, punctuation, and comparison errors recur.
Check noun agreement and comparison structures, for example “living standards ... better than those in Peru and Zaire.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
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