You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: - explain why you took the job - describe the problems that you experienced - suggest what could be done about them
Sample Response
Dear Mr Lechner, I have been working as a part-time fitness instructor at your gym for the last four months. I am grateful to have been offered the jobgratified to be offered the job, not only because I need to earn some extra money to cover my living expenses but also because I want to gain experienceenhance my experience in fitness training. Unfortunately, some problems at worksome impediments in the job have prompted me to askforce me to ask for your assistanceintervention. People often need help from instructors in using the gym equipment. However, it seems that other trainers are reluctant to offer assistancereluctant in offering assistance to gymclub members. I offer as much help as I canI offer as much as I can, but this means I am constantly being called uponconstantly in demand and am therefore working harderand therefore, working harder than anyone else in the gym. This situation seems rather unfair. While I realise that members receive an initial equipment inductioninitial gym instruction, I feel that they also need ongoing help with the equipment. Could you arrange forCould I suggest that a reminder be sent to all trainersa letter is sent to trainers reminding them of this responsibilitypromoting this? After all, the this kind of personal attentionpersonal attention of this kind makes people feel valued and may improve member satisfaction and retentionmay result in increased membership. Yours faithfully, Donald Green
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter fully explains why the writer took the job, identifies an unfair workload caused by unhelpful colleagues, and proposes a practical management response in a consistently professional tone. Its main limitation is occasional unnatural formality and a slightly vague final request. Improve precision by naming the trainers' shared responsibility directly and using more idiomatic workplace expressions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The task is addressed with relevant ideas, though development and precision are uneven.
Develop each main point with a specific explanation or consequence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is generally organized, though some progression and paragraph focus need improvement.
Give each paragraph one clear controlling purpose.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for the task, but inaccurate collocations and word choices recur.
Prefer precise, natural topic vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear overall, but recurring sentence-level errors reduce accuracy.
Proofread agreement, articles, prepositions, and clause structure.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter:
- explain why you took the job
- describe the problems that you experienced
- suggest what could be done about them
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