You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: - explain why you took the job - describe the problems that you experienced - suggest what could be done about them
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- Band 6.0View annotated correction →
- Task Achievement
- Band 6.0
- Coherence and Cohesion
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- Lexical Resource
- Band 6.5
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Band 6.0
Dear Mr Karim, I am writing to raise my concern about some specific problems with respect to my current job. I have been doing a part-time job as a Software Architect in your company for the last two months and have two specific problems which impeded me to work properly.
- Band 7.5View annotated correction →
- Task Achievement
- Band 8.0
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Band 7.5
- Lexical Resource
- Band 7.0
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Band 7.5
Dear Mr Lechner, I have been working as a part-time fitness instructor at your gym for the last four months. I am gratified to be offered the job, not only because I need to earn some extra money to cover my living expenses but also because I want to enhance my experience in fitness training.
- Band 6.0View annotated correction →
- Task Achievement
- Band 6.0
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Band 6.0
- Lexical Resource
- Band 5.5
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Band 5.5
Dear Mrs Fischer, I am a part-time Financial Assistant in your office and I joined here almost three months ago. I am honoured to be considered a deserving employee in your reputed organisation.
- Band 6.5View annotated correction →
- Task Achievement
- Band 7.0
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Band 6.0
- Lexical Resource
- Band 6.5
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Band 6.0
Dear Mr Lim, I have been working with your company for almost five weeks as a part-time call centre agent. I am writing this letter to raise my concerns regarding some of the problems that I encountered during my work at your company.
- Band 7.0View annotated correction →
- Task Achievement
- Band 7.5
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Band 6.5
- Lexical Resource
- Band 7.0
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Band 6.5
Dear Mrs Jeeni: I have joined your company as a part-time employee a few weeks ago and I am indebted for the opportunity you have bestowed on me. I took the job to finish my internship - which is a requirement to complete my Bachelor degree.
- Band 7.0View annotated correction →
- Task Achievement
- Band 7.5
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Band 7.0
- Lexical Resource
- Band 7.0
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Band 6.5
Dear Mr Johnson, I am writing to you regarding a few issues related to the job I have taken in your company. I decided to take the job in order to gain some practical experience as a law student but I am afraid some problems deter me to work properly, which is affecting me personally.
- Band 6.5View annotated correction →
- Task Achievement
- Band 7.0
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Band 6.0
- Lexical Resource
- Band 6.5
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Band 6.5
Dear Mr Anderson, I would like to thank you for giving me the opportunity to work in your company as a part-time cost-benefit analyst. So far I have been enjoying my work but some issues have been raised that need your interference to resolve.
- Band 7.5View annotated correction →
- Task Achievement
- Band 8.0
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Band 8.0
- Lexical Resource
- Band 7.0
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Band 7.0
Dear Mr Patrick, I am working as a part-time computer operator in your office for the last six weeks. I took the job to fund my internship in a software programming course.
- Band 7.0View annotated correction →
- Task Achievement
- Band 8.0
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Band 7.0
- Lexical Resource
- Band 7.0
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Band 6.5
Dear Mr Harris, I am a part-time call centre operator at your company, started working about 4 weeks ago. I am writing to indicate some of the problems I encountered during my work.
- Band 7.0View annotated correction →
- Task Achievement
- Band 8.0
- Coherence and Cohesion
- Band 7.0
- Lexical Resource
- Band 7.0
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Band 6.5
Dear Mr Chen, I am Rona Lyn Olivar, one of the part-time receptionists at your Sea View Hotel. I have been working here since July and I have taken the job to gain some experience that I thought would be helpful for my future career.