People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
It is believed that people will achieve their goals and have a successful career if they work hard, and luck has no effect on it. To a certain point, I would agree that some people succeedpeople are succeeded due to their diligent and hard-working habitshard working cultures, but I do believe that luck also plays an important role in people's livesplays an important part in people's life.
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response establishes an understandable, nuanced position that both hard work and luck contribute to success, and it uses some relevant topic vocabulary. However, it is only an introductory fragment, with no developed reasons, examples, body paragraphs, or conclusion; the highest-priority improvement is to turn this position into a complete essay that explains each factor in a separate paragraph and supports the comparison with specific examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The answer states a partial position, agreeing that hard work matters while also saying luck is important. However, it is only 59 words, far below the expected length, and it contains no developed body paragraphs, examples, or explanation.
Write a full essay with an introduction, two developed body paragraphs, and a conclusion, explaining how hard work and luck each contribute to success.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is a single short paragraph. There is a basic contrast from the statement to the writer’s view, but there is almost no progression because the argument stops after the introduction.
Organize the response into separate paragraphs and use topic sentences that develop one main idea at a time.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is understandable and includes relevant words such as goals, successful career, diligent, and luck. Range is limited by the short length, and some collocations are unnatural.
Use more precise success-related vocabulary such as perseverance, opportunity, circumstances, preparation, and career advancement, with examples.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a few complex clauses, but there are noticeable errors in passive structures and word forms. The short answer gives too little evidence of grammatical range.
Practise accurate verb patterns such as succeed, become successful, and hardworking, then apply them across longer supporting paragraphs.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.