People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
Every person wants to be successful in life. They try their bestThey have been trying their best, studying or working hard to reach what they wish for. Some people believe that success is about hard work. They argue that luck plays no partluck does not have a part in this case. People's success depends onPeople succeed depend on how much effort they makehow big their effort to get what they want, not onabout fortune. But I disagree with the opinion because I think that success is about effort, prayerpray, and luck. There are many things that people do to become successfulfor being successful in life, especially in their careers. They spend time workingspend the time to work as hard as they can and as much as they are able. Success becomes their goal so they push themselvestheir selves to get that. Successful people in this world are those who are always responsiblethem who always are responsible, honest, hardworking, and lucky. Sometimes people feel very confident and they just focus on their effort. They are too busy trying their best to achieve something so they forget that there is an important thing besides effort: luckbesides an effort: that is luck. I do not want to say that hard work is not important, but I believe that luck influences the result of our effort. For instance, occasionally people have tried their best to do somethingfor doing something but in the end, they do not get what they want. Many people forget that the biggest power in this universe is God, not themselves. Furthermore, thinking that hard work is the only way to be successfulthe only thing to be success sounds not wise. Some people failThere were few people fail to reach their dreams although they have worked hard for it. They have spent much of their time to try their best. But who knows, they get something which they did not expectwhich is not expecting. Is this because of luck?Is because of luck? This may be true becauseMaybe yes because the effort is not enough to be successful. We need luck and definitely, we need God. In conclusion, I believe that success is not only about how hard we try but also our luck. Every human has their own luck and their own fate but they have to still try. People should respect the process, not just the result. What happens in the futurein future will depend on our effort and the blessing of the Almighty.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The essay maintains a clear disagreement and communicates the view that effort, faith, and luck jointly shape success. Its main weakness is repetitive development supported only by general claims, while the single-paragraph structure and frequent word-choice and grammar errors limit clarity. Prioritize one concrete, fully explained example showing how opportunity or timing can affect the outcome of hard work, then organize the argument into distinct paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay gives a clear disagreement and explains that effort, prayer, and luck all affect success, but the reasoning is repetitive and the examples remain general.
Develop one concrete example of hard work failing without opportunity or timing, then explain exactly how that shows luck matters.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument is understandable, but it is presented as one long paragraph with repeated ideas about trying hard, luck, and God, so progression is limited.
Use separate paragraphs for your position, the role of effort, the role of luck, and a balanced conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for the topic, but there are frequent word-choice and word-form problems such as pray, them who, and to be success.
Learn fixed phrases for this topic: achieve success, make an effort, depend on luck, and succeed through hard work.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence meaning is usually recoverable, but grammatical errors are frequent in dependent clauses, verb forms, pronouns, and sentence fragments.
Revise clauses with depend on, because, although, and which, and make sure each sentence has a complete subject and verb.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Your response
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