When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
Many people think that traditional cultures will vanish due to the rapid development of new technology. Therefore, it is useless to spend time preservingspend some time for preserving the traditional ways of life. To a certain extentpoint, I would agree that modern technology has brought some benefits to our liveslife. But I disagree thatif we should abandon all the old fashioned cultures, as I believe that some traditional ways are still beneficial tofor us. It is a fact that many traditional ways have disappeared due to the adoptionexistence of new technology. Many people have abandoned their traditional ways and equipment, because modern tools make them more productiveas they become more productive with the modern tools. For example, instead of using carts and manpower, many farmers in developingdevelop countries are using tractors and bulldozers to cultivate their cropsplants these days. By using these machines, it saves a lot of times, money and energy. Therefore, many people prefer using modern technology to maintaining traditional waysprefer to use modern technology than to maintain the traditional ways. Despite the benefits of modern technology, some traditional ways of life are still important and relevant to our lives todayvalid for our lives nowadays. One example is thatOne of the examples is that people in the past wereare concerned about honesty and integrity. In the olden days, people did business based on trust and respect, as they had no contracts and due to the lack of paper resources. In the modern world, legalised agreement become an essential part of a business deal due to some parties might do any illegal and inappropriate act. These kinds of traditional cultures should be preserved and carriedcarry forward to the future generationsgeneration. In conclusion, to a certain extent, I would agree that some traditional cultures should be abandoned and replacedreplace by technology and modern practiceswith technology and modern ways. However, some traditional waysBut, some of the traditional ways are still valid and applicable to the modern world, and it is necessary to maintain and preserve them.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay sustains a clear qualified position: technology can replace inefficient practices, but valuable traditions should be preserved. Its strongest feature is the balanced structure and practical farming example; the main limitation is that the preservation case treats honesty as a tradition without clearly explaining how technology threatens it, and the business-contract discussion is confusing. Use a directly relevant cultural skill or lifestyle example, explain its preservation value, and correct frequent agreement and word-form errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A consistent partial-disagreement position is developed through technological efficiency and continued traditional value, but the preservation example is only loosely connected to technological change.
Use a threatened skill such as traditional craftwork or farming knowledge and explain its cultural, economic, or environmental value.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from technological replacement to reasons for preservation and a consistent conclusion, although the dense single block limits clarity.
Separate the introduction, technological benefits, preservation case, and conclusion into focused paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate vocabulary for technology and tradition, but inaccurate combinations such as "spend time for preserving," "develop countries," and "legalised agreement" recur.
Use precise phrases such as "spend time preserving," "developing countries," "legal agreements," and "pass traditions on."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied structures, but agreement, word-form, article, comparison, and passive errors occur frequently.
Correct forms such as "farmers in developing countries," "saves time," "prefer technology to traditional methods," and "should be preserved and passed on."
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IELTS Writing Task 2
When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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