The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
Sample Response
The table compares four social and economic indicatorsaspects for Canada, Japan, Peru and Zaire in 1994in the year 1994. A glance at the table reveals that Canada and Japan recorded much stronger results thanfar outweighed Peru and Zaire in terms of their citizens' social and economic conditionstheir citizens social and economic conditions. As the data suggests, average annual incomeyearly average earning for a Canadian was more than 11,100 US dollars11 thousand US dollar in 1994. The highest average annual incomehighest annual earning was in Japan where a citizen had an income of 15,760 US dollarsmade over 15 thousand. Annual income for a citizen in Peru and Zaire was less than 200 USD and these figures were roughly 70 to 120 times lower than those for Canada and Japanthis figure was almost 100 times fewer than that of the former two countries. Life expectancy was highest in Japan, 78 years, which was marginally higher than that of Canadians but substantially higher than that of Peru and Zaire, where life expectancy was 51 and 47 years respectively. Moreover, 99% of Canadian and Japanese adults99% Canadians and Japanese adults were literate while it was only 68% in Peru. By contrastOn contrary to that, two-thirds of adultstwo-thirds adults in Zaire were illiterate. Finally, daily calorie supply per person in Canada was the highest, 3,326 caloriesmore than 3.3 kilocalories while it was slightly below 3,000 caloriesslightly below than 3 kilocalories in Japan. However, Peru and Zaire could only ensure less than 2 kilocalories per person in a day.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overall contrast between the two wealthier and two poorer countries and covers all four indicators with well-selected comparisons. The main weakness is precision: calorie values are misstated as roughly 3 kilocalories rather than 3,326 and 2,846 calories, while several phrases and grammatical forms are awkward. Preserve the exact units and proofread comparative structures, articles, and plural forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and covers every indicator with relevant comparisons, but it seriously understates the calorie figures by using the wrong scale.
Report calorie supply as 3,326, 2,846, 1,927, and 1,749 calories and preserve the table’s units throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses logically from the overview through income, life expectancy, literacy, and calorie supply, though it is presented as one long paragraph.
Use a separate overview and two detail paragraphs that group the related social and economic indicators.
Lexical Resource
There is a reasonably varied range for comparison and quantity, but several collocations are imprecise or unnatural.
Replace phrases such as far outweighed, times fewer, and on contrary to that with precise comparative language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex comparisons are generally clear, but recurring errors with possessives, articles, percentage constructions, and comparative forms reduce accuracy.
Proofread forms such as citizens’ conditions, 99% of adults, two-thirds of adults, and slightly lower than.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
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