Cinema attendance in some countries is on the decline. What do you think are the causes of this development and what measures could be taken to solve it?
Sample Response
It is true that people's tendency to go to the cinemapeople’s tendency to see films is decreasing in some partsplaces of the world. This essay examines the various reasons forof this trend and tries to propose practical solutions for this problem for the film industrythis menace towards film industry.
To begin with, people have not enough free timeno sufficient free time to do their leisure activities as they are busy with their responsibilities: both professional and personalindividual. For example, most peoplemost of the people in India are doing full- time jobs without a break to meet their increasing family expensesincreasing economic needs for the family. Therefore, they may not get chances to enjoy cinemachances for enjoying cinema with their family or friends. Moreover, the quality of filmsquality of the film is another important reason. To explain, some filmmakers make compromisesdo some compromises in different sections such as casting, editing and visual effects, while making new films and create poor quality movies. Such type of movies bores the audiencemakes boredom for the audience very easily and as a result, they have no interest to watch themthese. For all these reasons, cinema attendance is declining to a greater extentis declining a greater extent in some nations. The availability of smart TVs, the internet and computersSmart TV, internet and computer has made it possible to enjoy movies at home and that is another reason people do not want to visit cinemascinema often. However, there are several methods to tackle this issue effectively. Firstly, the government should reduce people's workloadreduce working load of people and ensure there are enough entertainment facilitiesmake sure enough entertainment facilities for them in order to improve cinema attendancefilm attendance rate. In addition to that, the cost of film tickets should be reduced which would be helpful for ordinary people to buy film tickets from film theatres. Furthermore, all films should meet the basic standard to assure the quality. To be clear, standard films would be a visual treat for audiences and would also motivate them to watch again. By taking these measures, the issue can be reducedBy doing these methods issue can be solved to a certain extent.
To conclude, due to above-mentioned reasons people’s desire to watch movies is diminishing. I hope authority will consider the remedial measures to enhance cinema attendance.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response covers a useful range of causes and possible measures, and its introduction and conclusion make the purpose easy to follow. Its main weakness is that causes and solutions are crowded into one overloaded body paragraph, while some proposed actions are unrealistic or insufficiently explained and language errors reduce precision. Prioritise separating causes from solutions, selecting feasible measures, and explaining clearly how each would increase cinema attendance.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay addresses both causes and measures, including lack of time, film quality, home technology, ticket prices, and standards. Some solutions are unrealistic or not explained enough.
Prioritise realistic measures that cinemas or governments can actually take, and explain how each one would increase attendance.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, but the body paragraph is overloaded with causes and solutions together. This reduces clarity of progression.
Use one paragraph for causes and a separate paragraph for solutions.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate and sometimes topic-specific, but several collocations are inaccurate, such as makes boredom and working load.
Revise collocations connected with cinema attendance, film quality, workload, and entertainment facilities.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses some complex sentences, but errors in articles, prepositions, and verb patterns are frequent. Meaning is usually clear.
Edit noun phrases and prepositions after writing, especially with reasons, extent, authority, and film industry.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Cinema attendance in some countries is on the decline. What do you think are the causes of this development and what measures could be taken to solve it?
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