Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Sample Response
Some people say that the invention of computers is one of humankind's greatest inventionsone of the greatest humankind's inventions. However, other people think that computers make their liveslife more stressful. I agree with those people who think that computers have brought many benefits and playcomputers brought many benefits and play a very important role in our modern life. First of all, every company nowadays uses a computer to store its data and perform different operationsmake different kinds of operations. It is very difficult to imagine life without computers. A company would have to store millions of papers and documents. Moreover, a customer would have to wait for hours to checkwait hours to check theirhis balance or get a piece of information about his transactions at his bank, while an employee lookedan employee was looking trough those papers. Another important aspect of this is that people are able to entertype all their information, make corrections, print or send documents using computers. ThisIt makes life much easier. One can spend the rest of the time watching TV with his family or working on something new. We use computers every day sometimes without even knowing iteven not knowing it. When we go to a store and use our credit cards, many computerscredit cards many computers process our information and perform transactions. When we need to get some cash we use cash machinesmoney access machines that are computerised too. SecondlySecond of all, computers have provided a great meanscomputers provided a great means of communication: the internetcommunication - the Internet. I think it is the easiest and cheapest way to get in touch with relatives, friends, business colleagues, etc. Nowadays, the world is becomingNowadays the world becomes smaller and smaller. When I was a little girl, I could not imagine that it would be possible to communicate with people from around the world so easilyfrom all around the world in so easy way. A person can get the latest news, become friends with someone from another country, find his old friends, ask for a piece of advice, etc. Finally, in addition to these practical benefits people can shop without leaving their house. They just use internet accessuse an Internet access, a computer and their cards to make a payment. It is kind of difficult to imagine that a few years ago people had to spend their time in lines buying tickets. Now, a person can choose a destination, company, date and time and get tickets delivered to his door. I think it is amazing. To sum up, I believe that computers have made our lives easiercomputers made our lives easier. They have changed our attitude towards lifeThey change our attitude towards life. I think with the invention of computers people became closer and friendlier.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The essay presents a firm opinion and develops it through a broad, coherent range of practical benefits, including business efficiency, communication, and online purchasing. Progression is clear and the examples make the argument convincing, although recurring awkward collocations, article errors, and inconsistent tense choices prevent consistently precise expression. The highest priority is a careful language edit that preserves the strong content while making phrasing more natural and grammatically controlled.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly answers the question with a clear position and well-developed, relevant examples across several areas of life.
Add a brief qualification acknowledging when computers may cause stress to make the opinion more nuanced without diluting it.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through clearly focused paragraphs, and cohesive devices generally guide the reader effectively despite occasional mechanical sequencing.
Vary transitions and tighten repetitive references to computers so that connections feel less explicitly signposted.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently broad vocabulary conveys detailed practical examples, though several awkward collocations and imprecise expressions remain noticeable.
Refine phrases such as make operations, money access machines, and use an Internet access into natural academic English.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay uses a good variety of complex structures, but recurring article, tense, punctuation, and preposition errors reduce consistent accuracy.
Proofread for article use and tense consistency, especially when shifting between present-day examples and hypothetical past situations.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Your response
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