You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: - explain why you took the job - describe the problems that you experienced - suggest what could be done about them

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Sample Response

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Dear Mr Karim, I am writing to raise my concernsconcern about some specific problems about my current positionwith respect to my current job. I have been working part-timedoing a part-time job as a software architectas a Software Architect in your company for the last two months and have encountered two specific problemshave two specific problems that prevent me from working effectivelywhich impeded me to work properly. I am hoping you would intervene and resolveresolved these problems. I really like my job and am looking forward to workinglooking forward to working for your company and contributing my best effortscontribute with my best effort. But sadly, I can not access the Internet and havehad been restricted to use the office intranet. Frankly speaking, I have never faced it in another company. I completely understand all the security policiesall the securities and policies, but in fact, employees often struggle with different problems whileduring developing new discrete and concrete components in SOA patterns and Googling is the best way to get help and resources. Therefore, I sincerely ask you to allow us to access the Internet. Moreover, I was askedinformed to help the User Interface (UI) team swiftly accomplish their job a few weeks ago. But my current seat arrangement is quite inconvenient to interact with the UI team members as they are on a different floor. Hence, I would appreciate it if you put my seat near the UI development team immediately. I beg your pardon for pointing out issues which sound more like complaints. My sincere apology for that and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Ali Khan

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The letter's strongest feature is its clear description of two workplace problems and practical requests for resolving them, supported by relevant technical context. However, it never clearly explains why the job was taken, and frequent grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision. The highest priority is to address the missing first bullet directly, then edit verb forms and awkward phrases so the professional message reads more fluently.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

6.0
Scoring rule

The purpose is clear and both problems receive relevant solutions, but the reason for taking the job is not actually explained.

Next step

Add a direct, developed reason for accepting the part-time position so all three bullet points are covered.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

The ideas progress logically through the two problems, although the single undivided paragraph and some mechanical linking reduce clarity.

Next step

Separate the opening, each problem-and-solution pair, and the closing into purposeful paragraphs.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

The letter uses a good range of workplace and technical vocabulary, but several collocations are inaccurate or unnatural.

Next step

Replace phrases such as impeded me to work and all the securities with natural workplace English.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the message, but recurring verb-form, agreement, and clause errors weaken control.

Next step

Proofread coordinated verb phrases and tense choices, especially constructions such as would intervene and resolved.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter:

- explain why you took the job

- describe the problems that you experienced

- suggest what could be done about them

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