People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
Success is the ultimate goal of everyone. All of us are doing our best to achieve success in different fields of life such as work and studyas work and study. People try to achieve success through many ways; some of them are hard workers who dependsome of them are hard workers, they depend on their efforts to gain success. Others relyare relying on their connections with influential peoplerelations with important or authorised persons to reach their goals. In addition to the previous, there is a category of lucky people where luck plays an important roleluck plays important role in their lives and helps them very much. Luck, in my opinion, has a great effecteffects on the people's life, as it can shift their ways into different directions that may change their lives completely forto the better, for example: Lionel Messi, the most famous football player in the world, was the son of a very poor familywas a son of very poor family in Argentina and suffered from a medical problem when he was a childwhile he was children related to his growth and bone formation. The luck leads a scout of one of the biggest football clubsclub in Spain to see his skills while he was playing in his area's street in Argentina and presented him to the club, where he obtained the due care and now Lionel Messi is may be the most famous person in the world. Besides thatBeside of that, luck and coincidence can serve humanity in a positive way, no one can deny the role of luck in the story of Newton and the apple which later led to the discovery ofwhich lead after that to discover the gravity rules. I tend to see that, hard working is the first step of success and it is a mandatory thing, but also luck is very important. So, from my point of view, I think they are complementing each other. Last but not least, It should not be left unmentioned that success is the normal result of working hard and one should not only depend on his/her luck for a long time to achieve success because it may not work for many times.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response offers a clear view that hard work and luck can complement each other, supported by recognizable examples that make its central idea easy to understand. However, the argument becomes a single extended paragraph and sometimes drifts into lengthy storytelling without directly challenging the statement; organise the essay into focused paragraphs and connect each example explicitly to a concise disagreement with the absolute claim.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The answer gives a clear view that hard work and luck both matter and includes relevant examples, but the response partly drifts into storytelling and does not fully test the absolute claim that luck has nothing to do with success.
State your disagreement more directly and use one paragraph for hard work and one for luck, with each example tied back to the claim.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is written as one long paragraph, so progression is difficult to follow despite some logical movement between ideas.
Divide the essay into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, each with a clear controlling idea.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate and sometimes topic-appropriate, but there are repeated words and several inaccurate collocations.
Use precise phrases such as plays an important role, strong connections, and complements hard work.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is a mix of simple and complex grammar, but frequent agreement, article, and sentence-boundary errors reduce control.
Break long sentences into shorter ones and check subject-verb agreement and singular/plural forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.