People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
At the present time, people believe that only hardworking people will succeed and there's no place for luck. I totally disagree with this statementthe rubric above due to the fact that luck can sometimes influence opportunitiespeople cannot earn money without luck and with no luck people won't be able to get a job and I will explain thisit will be proven in the following essay.
Firstly, since the dawn of time people have believed in luckpeople believed to luck, for example, people always carry some kind of talismans or charmschokers. In IrelandIn the Ireland, people believe that green clover will bring them money and luck. And the situation has not changedhas not been changed at the present as well. You can hold a questionnaire and ask strangers whether they believeask strangers "do they believe in luck or not?" I'm sure that 100% of people will say ‘yes’; because luckthe luck is an inalienable part of the life of human beings.
Secondly, without luck people won't be able to get even a job. For instance, when people are lookingwhen people looking for a job, they are searching for jobs in newspaperssearching them on newspapers and magazines and they don't know what awaitsexpects them there, they only rely on luck and trying to find a suitable job for themselves. Furthermore, even at the school sometimes kids are getting their marks by luck, which means that teachers sometimes can mix up jobs and mark the student wrong. It's also a clear example of luck.
On the other hand, if people relyif people will rely on only luck they will not get anything, truly luck is with us but it helps only when we work hard. For example, in difficult situations when people cannot make a choice between something, they are choosing only by their instincts and if they work hard and learn a lot, they know which decision to make, it all comes from experience.
After analysing both sides of this issue, I have concluded that despite the hard work, people always need at least a little luckthe grain of luck for the successful life.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a recognisable position and uses clear paragraphing to move through several ideas about luck and effort. However, the supporting examples are broad or implausible, and the later acknowledgement that hard work matters is not fully reconciled with the opening claim, while frequent language errors weaken precision. Develop two realistic, well-explained examples and connect each one explicitly to a consistent final position.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay gives a clear disagreement, but the support is weak, relies on broad claims, and only briefly explains the relationship between luck and hard work.
Use realistic examples showing how opportunity, timing, and effort interact in success.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraph structure is clear, but some links are mechanical and the third body paragraph partly contradicts the introduction without being explained enough.
Use each paragraph to develop one reason and connect it clearly to your final position.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary communicates the main ideas but includes wrong collocations and informal or inaccurate examples.
Use precise vocabulary such as "opportunity", "chance", "preparation", and "persistence".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in verb patterns, articles, conditionals, and sentence boundaries are noticeable, though meaning is usually clear.
Review conditional clauses and verb patterns after "believe", "look for", and "rely on".
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IELTS Writing Task 2
People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Your response
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