It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
It is said that ‘nothing is impossible’‘nothing is impossible ' in this world. To make difficult goalsevery impossible thing possible, lots of hard work, sacrifice, determination, and good health are required. In some exceptional casesIn an exception, some people face failureconfront to failure despite performing their duties sincerely.
I believe that those unsuccessful people lacked natural talentwere deprived of inborn talent. Sometimes, it may happen that luck does not favour them. For instance, a highly talented athlete who was preparing for competition brokebreaks his leg. Provided that he had not broken his leg, he would have might have performed wellat least won the bronze medal but luck did not favour him. Furthermore, there was another athlete who never won any medal in his career despite his sincere endeavour. It means that he was not gifted to become a professional athlete. So, it would be better ifit would better if he ended his career as an athletebrings down the curtain as an athlete. On the contrary, there are some people in the world who fail to realise their interest. Certainly, one can have a rewarding career if one's talent is identified earlydeduced on time. Otherwise, life becomes far worse than expectations. Let's imagine, what will happen if Pele had pursued his career other than football? Surely, other people might have been filled his shoesfilled up the shoe as 'a king of football'. But, this did not happen as football passionate Pele transformed gifted talent into a reality. So, natural talent cannot be fostered unless one interests in it. It is the obligation of parents and teachersteacher to motivate, care and assist in making their children's future prosperous. Otherwise, children have to lead the life beyond their acumen and capacity. It does no goodNeither does it any good to children themselves nor to the parents and the country if the natural talents of a particular field get spoiled.
In conclusion, one can learn whatever they are taught but to become the master of it, one should be born with the talent for it.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear opinion that exceptional achievement depends on natural talent and supports it with several concrete sporting examples. However, the opposing view is barely developed, while the long central paragraph shifts among luck, interest, and parental responsibility with some unclear phrasing; the priority is to build one focused paragraph for each view and compare how training and innate ability contribute to success.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay gives a clear opinion that natural talent is necessary, but it gives limited attention to the opposing view that any child can be taught. Much of the discussion focuses on luck, injury, and failed athletes rather than directly comparing talent with training.
Devote one body paragraph to natural ability and one to teaching or practice, then explain why one view is stronger in your opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is an introduction, a long central body paragraph, and a conclusion. Progression is uneven because several examples are packed into one paragraph and links between talent, luck, and interest are sometimes unclear.
Use shorter body paragraphs with clear topic sentences so each view is developed in a controlled sequence.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary range is sufficient for the topic, with words such as athlete, talented, professional, interest, and prosperous. However, several expressions are unnatural or inaccurate, including deduced on time and filled up the shoe.
Focus on accurate collocations for talent and training, such as identify talent, develop ability, receive coaching, and fulfil potential.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay attempts complex structures, including conditionals and concessive clauses, but frequent errors in prepositions, articles, and sentence formation reduce control. Some sentence meanings remain understandable but awkward.
Revise complex sentences for subject-verb agreement and preposition choice before adding more examples.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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