It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Each child in this world comes with a great potential and different children have different talents for various activities. One child may have fantastic talents for sports and someone may have more potential to become a mathematician, musician or an artist. It is quite an interesting natural phenomenonIt’s a quite interesting natural phenomenon that we face within the children. To make the world more beautiful and enriched, we should nurture the different thoughts and different innate abilities of children. In my opinion nature and nurture both have anthe equal role to play for a child to become a successful professional.
To begin with, every child shows his or her abilitiesreflects his/her abilities at the infant stage and parents can help decide the child's life pathparents can decide their life path. Those children come with natural talents and outshine others. For instance, a child shows more promising performance among the siblings in mathematics even though all of them have received the same careall of them have got same care and environment. This proves that people have inborn talents that we cannot deny. No doubt proper care and effective teaching method can hone someone's performance but this is not always the case. If training and teaching were everythingIf training and teaching would have been everything we would certainly recreate great minds like Newton, Einstein, Mozart and Shakespeare every year.
From another point of viewFrom a neutral point of view, it depends on brain capacity and parents' caredepends on the brain capacity and also with the parent’s care. If the parents are wiser and more talented, we can see their children become more talented. Sometimes it gives a broader outlook of a child's life. They easily absorb the things what they learn from the school as well as from the society. Genetic engineering also confirms that talented parents usually give birth toof talented children. However, this does not guarantee that a child of talented anda successful parents will always be talented and successful. For this, an outstanding amount of effort and dedication would be required both from the parents and the child.
On the contrary, most of the children do not have outstanding inborn talents. They might have some potentialpotentials but that cannot be explored until they are engaged in a certain field. Without practice and commitment, many talented individuals do not even explore their potential in their entire life. Thus practice, excellent teaching method and dedication can bring out the best of a child and guide him for the rest of the life. Consequently, children become more talented and experts only if they are engaged in a certain field. For an instance, well-known football player Ronaldo had his own talentRonaldo had has his own talents, but he has improved this skill only by proper guidelines and practice.
To conclude, talent makes many people stand out of the crowd and helps to perform extraordinary things. However proper care, environment and dedication are also required to create professionals with expertise and skillkill.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response discusses both innate ability and training, sustains a balanced opinion, and supports the discussion with relevant examples. Its main weakness is uneven precision: broad claims about genetics and parents, repeated ideas, inaccurate collocations, and recurring grammatical errors weaken otherwise clear development; prioritise more carefully qualified examples and concise topic sentences, then proofread key collocations and clause structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay discusses both views and gives a clear opinion that nature and nurture both matter. It includes relevant examples and development, although some points about genetics and parents are asserted too broadly and the final word choice weakens the conclusion.
Keep the balanced position, but make examples more precise and avoid unsupported claims such as talented parents usually produce talented children.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is well paragraphed and generally progresses from natural talent to training. Some repetition of talented and child, plus a slightly unclear neutral paragraph, reduces cohesion.
Use clearer topic sentences and avoid repeating the same claim about talent and parents across adjacent paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
There is enough range for the topic, including nurture, innate abilities, hone, commitment, and dedication. Lexical accuracy is uneven, with errors such as give birth of, potentials, and expertise and kill.
Use accurate collocations: give birth to, potential, develop expertise, natural ability, deliberate practice, and professional skill.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentence forms is attempted, but grammar errors appear regularly in articles, conditionals, prepositions, and noun forms. Most errors do not prevent understanding.
Check conditional structures and prepositions after depend, give birth, engage in, and improve.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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