Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Sample Response
The first computer was invented in 1822 by Charles Babbage, and it was used for basic arithmetic calculationscalculation. For some people, computers have made their livesthe computer has made their life easier. For othersFor other humans, computers have made their liveslifestyle more stressful. The way I see it is thatThe way I see is that computers are essentialthe computers are essential in our liveslife and they make many kinds of work easiermake easy many kinds of jobs such as accounting and engineeringlike the jobs of an accountant and an engineer. And it also makes life more colourful. On the other hand, computers can be harmful to young peoplethe computer is dangerous for youngsters. Nowadays, computers have a lot of games about war and zombies. Doctors think that games like these can change young people's mindschange their mind to have negative attitudes and thoughtsnegative impressions and thought. At first, computers make people happy, but on the other side, computers can change teenagers' mindsteenagers’ mind through gameswith the way of games or the internet. Secondly, sitting at a computer too much can damage people's eyesightcan be damage human's eyesight. But for this inventors created the glasses against worsening eyesight. Thirdly, it can do people slothful, for instance, if workers play games at working time in order to work hard. However, every disadvantage has an advantageevery minus there is plus. The major advantage is that, with computers you can do reach to points easily. For example, if you work on some projects, you can create videos easilydo lightly videos with computer assistancehelps. Next positive side is improving knowledge by a computer, like reading and solving the critical issues. Looking thirdly at a positive side, you can save some documents or pictures which are valuable for you. Taking everything into account, I believe that in near future by computers you can do almost everything. Nevertheless, in today's world, computers can make work easierworking on computers can do works easier. Despite working easy, it can seriously harm your healthgive harm to your health.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response offers a recognisable opinion and considers several advantages and disadvantages of computers, including productivity, learning, entertainment, and health. However, ideas are mostly brief or unclear, the single-paragraph structure obscures progression, and frequent language errors sometimes make meaning difficult; the priority is to select two well-explained reasons, organise them into paragraphs, and express them through short, accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A generally positive opinion is present and several relevant effects are mentioned, but development is uneven and some supporting claims are unclear.
Choose one principal benefit and one acknowledged drawback, explain each with a credible example, and restate a consistent final judgement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Basic sequencing markers indicate movement between points, but the entire essay forms one paragraph and the progression becomes list-like and confusing.
Use separate introduction, advantage, disadvantage, and conclusion paragraphs, with one controlling idea in each body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient to identify the topic, but frequent inaccurate choices such as “do people slothful” and “do reach to points” obscure intended meanings.
Rely on common, accurate phrases such as “make people less active,” “complete tasks,” and “harm eyesight” rather than forcing unfamiliar words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in articles, agreement, pronouns, verb patterns, and sentence construction make many clauses awkward and sometimes difficult to understand.
Build short subject–verb–object sentences first, then check plural agreement and infinitive forms before combining ideas.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Your response
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