Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves?
Sample Response
Although there is a wide disparity in the resources available to the people living in different countries, I would arguecountries, still, I would argue that governments should be accountablethe government should be accountable for fulfilling its citizens day to day needs.
It is imperative that the government in each country is held responsible for providing its citizens with basic needsproviding its citizen basic needs. Firstly, if help is always at hand, some governments may not put in all their efforts to make ends meetmeet both hands, while a few others arewhile, few others are going thean extra mile to meet their own needs as well as other nations' demandscater for their own as well as the other nations demand. Poor nations can borrow money from the World Bankworld bank to set up, for instance, small-scale industriesshort scale industries to create employment for theirits people and boost the economy in the long runin long run. Various other steps can always be taken by engagingventuring in trade and commerce for well- being of the nation.
Secondly, it may seem unfair to the citizens of the nation providing support that the taxes they paythe taxes paid by them for the development of their own nation are being used to support other countriesbeing used towards others. Furthermore, it is also a Herculeanherculean task to categorise all the nations into rich and poor, and then to establish criteria for prioritisingselect a criterion to decide the priority among nations seeking help. Despite all that, we all should be ready to offer help to a nation in times of crisescrisis that arise due to unforeseen circumstances, for instance, floods, earthquakes, and hurricanesfloods, earthquake, hurricanes.
In conclusion, people's basic needsthe common needs of a man should be looked after by the ruling government they chosegovernment he chose for himself while in times of calamities, we all should stand united for each other.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear, nuanced position that poorer governments should meet routine needs while international support remains appropriate during crises, and its ideas follow a logical sequence. Its main limitation is recurrent inaccurate phrasing and grammatical control, which makes some supporting points difficult to interpret; the priority is to express the dependency and fairness arguments in simpler, more precise sentences with concrete support.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear qualified position and develops relevant arguments about government responsibility, aid dependency, taxpayer fairness, and emergency assistance.
Support the dependency and fairness claims with a specific example showing how domestic policy or targeted aid would work in practice.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are arranged in clear paragraphs and progress logically through two reasons to a qualified conclusion, although some linking is mechanical or awkward.
Use more direct topic sentences and make the shift from objections to emergency aid explicit within the third paragraph.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary shows adequate range for international aid and government responsibility, but several inaccurate or nonstandard phrases obscure intended meanings.
Use precise expressions such as meet basic needs, small-scale industries, the World Bank, economic development, and disaster relief.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence forms is used, but article, agreement, possessive, plural, and punctuation errors recur throughout.
Check noun phrases for possessives and number agreement, then divide heavily punctuated sentences into clearer independent clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizen themselves?
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