Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Sample Response
Some people think that computers have made our lives easier and more comfortableour life easier and comfortable, while others believe that computers have more disadvantages than advantages. This essay will discuss both sides of this issue. The most important advantage of computers is that they make our life easier, how? you may ask! The applications of computersThe application of the computer in our daily life is endless. For instance, you can buy whatever you want by clicking a buttonclicking on a button (online shopping). Furthermore, currently, people are working fromat home thanks to computer technologydue to computer technologies. In addition to this, computers help usit helps us to communicate with our relativescommunicate our relatives who live far awaywho are staying far away. Communication is highly efficientThe communication efficiency is really great while the cost is quite low. Finally, it has made our life more interesting, you can download your preferred music, films, and other mediamusic, movie etc. or play video games with your friends online and most importantly whenever you want. Not only in daily life but also at work, computers are playing a major roleplaying the big role. People only need to supervise operationsPeople just have to control and computers will perform other tasksthe computer will do another job. In big factories, almost all jobs are done by computers and employees only need to monitor thememployees just have to check it. Not only factories can be an example of the usefulness of computers, in banks your property is also secured by computers, which makes the life of bankers more convenient. But there are certain disadvantages of computers. These computer games causeAforesaid computer games are caused computer addiction among children. For instance,For instance: a lot of schoolboys do not go to schoolaren't gone to school because of computers. They simply can't stop using themcome off from it; they just can't live without computers anymore. Moreover, not only addiction but also poor eyesighta bad vision is caused by computer. A lot of time people are spent in front of the computer, which really hurts their eyes. Not only illness can be said about the bad side of computers, above-named banks also not secured from so-called "phishing", hackers simply are stealing money from the banks, by just breaking or finding the necessary codes for this. Also in factories, computers are doing a lot of things but only one hitch in one sector and it will stop the whole factory. In conclusion, in my view, computers are very important part of our life, but we should be very careful about using them appropriately.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response’s strongest feature is its wide range of relevant examples covering convenience at home and work as well as addiction, health, security, and industrial risks. Its main limitation is that the opinion is only loosely defined and frequent grammatical errors disrupt fluency; the highest-priority improvement is to state a direct judgement early and develop it through clearly paragraphed, accurately constructed sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response examines both positive and negative effects with many relevant examples, but its own judgement remains broad and insufficiently argued.
State clearly whether computers make life easier overall and use each body section to justify that precise position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The advantages and disadvantages follow an understandable sequence, though one continuous paragraph, mechanical linking, and punctuation problems weaken progression.
Separate the introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion into focused paragraphs with controlled transitions.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of technology-related vocabulary, but recurrent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Replace awkward expressions with natural combinations such as communicate with relatives, play a major role, and suffer from poor eyesight.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some varied structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, tense, articles, passives, and clause construction sometimes make sentences difficult to follow.
Build complete subject–verb clauses first, then check verb forms and agreement systematically before adding complex linking.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
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