Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Sample Response
"The advent of computers has ushered in a new age of technological innovationdefined a new age in technology and revolution." As this statement suggests,As rightly said, things have changed from the past and will certainly change in the futurechange in future. Computers deserve much of the creditOne of the biggest credits goes to computers. This simple looking box has unlimited capabilities that have yet to be fully explored and usedcapabilities which are yet to be unfolded and used for. From entertainment to work, computers affect every aspect of human lifecomputer covers every prospect of human life. Today an average child would want a computer at any cost. From a child to an old man, each has their own reasonhis/her own need to have a computer. Since the advent of these machines, innovation and remodelling have led to the reduction in its size from the occupation of a large hall by a single machine to a machine that stands on a small table or fits in a bag and during all these changes, the processing and speed have never failed to improve. With computers around, lifeWith computers around life has been easier than ever. For an example, numerous calculations can be done in a click; we can socialise with people all over the world, share the latest news, and develop projects ranging from art to complex engineering. From monitoring and diagnosis to operationsFrom monitoring, diagnosing to operations, healthcare relies on computershealth uses the help of the computers. We depend on computers to pass leisure timefor passing idle time. A person born in this age might not be able to survive without a computer. But even with these advantages and benefits, computers also bring some disadvantages. As all workworks have started to be saved as digital files on computersin soft copy in computers, securing thatthose data has become more difficult. Confidential information is always at risk of being leakedLeakage of confidential information is always at stake. Even from an ordinary user's perspectiveEven through a normal man's eyes, at home misuse of computers and the information they holdinformation it holds can cause just but waste of time. Time numerous social sites and applications deviate a human from his daily tasks into the virtual world. Games pull young children into pressing buttons of their controllers and spending hours a day at home instead of enjoying physical games outside. Therefore, computers have their pros and consit has its pros and cons; all that counts is how we use it.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is strongest in its wide range of relevant examples, covering communication, calculation, healthcare, data security, distraction, and children’s inactivity. Its main limitation is that the opinion is only partly consistent, the essay is presented as one long paragraph, and several ideas are listed or expressed awkwardly rather than fully developed. The highest-priority improvement is to state a precise position early and organise two or three strongest reasons into focused paragraphs with clear explanation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response discusses both convenience and complexity with relevant examples, but its final position is broad and some points receive limited explanation.
State whether the benefits generally outweigh the stresses and develop the strongest evidence for that judgement rather than listing many uses.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a broad progression from benefits to drawbacks and a conclusion, but the absence of paragraphing and several abrupt shifts weaken coherence.
Separate the introduction, benefits, drawbacks, and conclusion into distinct paragraphs with one central idea in each.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate and sometimes varied, but recurring inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce naturalness and precision.
Replace expressions such as “covers every prospect,” “health uses the help,” and “leakage is at stake” with standard collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, pronoun reference, and sentence construction reduce accuracy.
Break long sentences into controlled units and check agreement and singular-plural reference before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Your response
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