People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities?
Sample Response
Certain people think they attend colleges/universities to gain knowledge whereas some other people think to prepare for their career. Another set of people prefers to attend college to gainget new experiences. Universities shape societydictate the society with the values promoted through educationvalues present in education. Some people prefer to attend college to gain knowledge and apply their knowledge in their day to day life. These people choose a university to increase their knowledge only which is useful to the society and they are least bothered about the jobs or job market. Universities should produce knowledge-based professionals but not job seekers. People who gaingot sufficient knowledge can overcome any issue in their daily lives as well as their careersdaily life as well as career. My friend, sham came out of Hindu university with sufficient knowledge never worried about the career. He can easily transitiontransoms from one field to another with the extensive knowledge that he gainedwith his vast knowledge what he gained from university. There is always another sidethe another side of the coin. Some people prefer to attend universities to improve their career prospectsincrease their career chances as they are very interestedso much interested in a profitable career. And companies also prefer certain universities only to recruit candidates for their vacanciesrecruit for their openings. I selected Nehru University to pursue postgraduate study in computingto do my post graduate in computers to attract top IT giants and it really worked for me. Some other peopleSome other sets of people choose universities to get new experiences and enhance their knowledge or to secure suitable jobsto get suitable jobs for them. Ram, one of my state ministers, chosestate ministers choose a university to get experience in student politics and also succeeded in national politicsgot successes in main politics also. In conclusion, I prefer to attend college to gain knowledge and rather than solely for a career or experiencenot only career or experience only. People who gain knowledge in their core fieldPeople who gained knowledge in their core area can succeed in other areasalways get successes in any other area.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies three relevant motivations for university attendance—knowledge, career preparation, and new experiences—and provides personal examples for each. Its strongest idea is that knowledge can support adaptability across careers, but the discussion is repetitive, entirely unparagraphled, and frequently obscured by inaccurate grammar and word choice. The highest-priority improvement is to organise one focused paragraph around each motivation and express the examples in clear, controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Several relevant reasons are addressed and illustrated, but the preference for knowledge dominates the response and some examples are only loosely explained.
Give balanced explanation of how knowledge, career preparation, and new experiences each meet a distinct student need.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence of motivations is broadly understandable, but the single-paragraph format, repetition, and abrupt transitions weaken overall progression.
Use an introduction, one paragraph per main reason, and a concise conclusion, with clear topic sentences marking each shift.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient to discuss education and careers, but frequent repetition, incorrect word forms, and awkward collocations reduce precision.
Use natural phrases such as 'broaden knowledge', 'improve career prospects', 'gain new experiences', and 'move between fields'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in tense, agreement, articles, relative clauses, and sentence boundaries often strain clarity.
Write shorter complete sentences and check each verb for tense and agreement before combining ideas with subordinate clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities?
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