Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Sample Response
Some people say that the invention of computers is one of the greatest inventions in human historygreatest humankind's inventions. However, other people think that computers make their liveslife more stressful. I agree with those people who think that computers have brought many benefits and playcomputers brought many benefits and play a very important role in our modern life. First of all, every company nowadays uses a computer to store its data and performmake different kinds of operations. It is very difficult to imagine life without computers. A company would have to store millions of paper documentsmillions of papers and documents. Moreover, a customer would have to wait hours to check his balance or get a piece of information about his transactions at his bank, while an employee was looking trough those papers. Another important aspect of this is that people are able to entertype all their information, make corrections, print or send documents using computers. It makes life much easier. One can spend their remaining timethe rest of the time watching TV with his family or working on something new. We use computers every day sometimes without even realizing itsometimes even not knowing it. When we go to a store and use our credit cards, manycredit cards many computers process our information and perform transactions. When we need to get some cash we use automated teller machinesmoney access machines that are computerised too. SecondlySecond of all, computers provideprovided a great means of communication: the Internetcommunication - the Internet. I think it is the easiest and cheapest way to get in touch with relatives, friends, business colleagues, etc. Nowadays, the world is becomingNowadays the world becomes smaller and smaller. When I was a little girl, I could not imagine that it would be possible to communicate with people from all around the world so easilyin so easy way. A person can get the latest news, become friends with someone from another country, find his old friends, ask for a piece of advice, etc. Finally, in addition to these practical benefits, peoplepractical benefits people can shop without leaving their house. They just use Internet accessan Internet access, a computer and their cards to make a payment. It is kind of difficult to imagine that a few years ago people had to spend their time in linelines buying tickets. Now, a person can choose a destination, company, date and time and get tickets delivered to his door. I think it is amazing. To sum up, I believe that computers have made our lives easiercomputers made our lives easier. They change our attitude towards life. I think with the invention of computers people became closer and friendlier.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear opinion and supports it with an extended, easy-to-follow range of practical examples involving work, banking, communication, and shopping. The main weakness is recurring awkward phrasing and grammatical inaccuracy, while the unbroken paragraph also obscures the otherwise logical structure. Prioritise dividing the argument into focused paragraphs and refining articles, tense choices, and natural collocations throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported with several relevant, reasonably developed examples of how computers make life easier.
Deepen the argument by explaining the significance of the strongest examples rather than accumulating similar benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a logical sequence and cohesive markers guide the reader, but the whole response appears as one paragraph and some links are mechanical.
Use distinct paragraphs for workplace efficiency, communication, shopping, and the conclusion, with clearer topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of topic vocabulary, though awkward combinations and inaccurate expressions occur regularly.
Practise natural collocations for technology and services, replacing phrases such as make operations and use an Internet access.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer uses both simple and complex sentences, but recurring errors in articles, tense, agreement, pronouns, and punctuation limit control.
Review article use and maintain consistent tense and subject-verb agreement when describing general present-day benefits.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
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