The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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Sample Response
The line graph illustrates the changes indescribes data about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with forecasts up to 2040.between 1970 and 2040.
Overall, the percentage of the population living in cities in all four Asian countries increases across both past and projected figures.increase and not only in the past but also in future. Specifically, Malaysia experiencesthis data in Malaysia sees the most significant growth. In contrast, that ofthose in Thailand and Indonesia rise steadily.
The percentage of the population living in cities in Malaysia wentgoes up markedly from 30% to more than 80% (around 84%)approximately 80% from 1970 to 2040. SimilarlyThen, a significant increase can be seen in the percentage of the population living in urban areas in Indonesia, rising from the lowest figure of around 15% to the second highest at over 60% over the period.living in Indonesia in cities and it from the lowest position to second highest from about 15% to 60% at the same time.
The urban population percentage in the Philippines rose steadily from 1970 to 1980,There was a fluctuation in this percentage in the Philippines from 1970 to 1980, after which it climbed steadilysubstantially jumped from roughly 32% to 50% and then it slowly dropped from 1990 to 2010, before rebounding steadilyascending significantly and it is projected to reach approximately 55% by 2040.the line graph predict it will reach around 50% in 2040. Finally, the percentage of Thailand's urban populationthe population in Thailand in cities increased gently but noticeably from 19% to just over 30%, and the graph predicts a steeper increase in the future, reaching 50% by 2040.predict there will see a steep increase in this data in the future.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report effectively highlights key overall trends across all four countries and provides a clear summary structure. However, grammatical inaccuracies in subject-verb agreement and broken clause construction frequently disrupt the sentence flow. To raise performance, focus on refining complex sentence structures and ensuring accurate numerical reporting across time periods.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response includes a clear overview and addresses the main trends, though some specific numerical descriptions contain minor inaccuracies.
Ensure all figures and trend ranges match the graph data precisely, particularly for non-linear trends like the Philippines.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organized by country with clear paragraphing, though referencing pronouns and linking phrases are occasionally awkward.
Improve sentence linking by using clearer referencing structures instead of repetitive phrases like 'this data'.
Lexical Resource
An adequate range of trend vocabulary is used, though there are occasional errors in word combination and phrasal choices.
Focus on accurate word partnerships when describing data transitions, such as pairing percentages correctly with prepositions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
While a mix of past and future structures is attempted, frequent subject-verb agreement errors and incomplete clauses limit grammatical accuracy.
Proofread carefully to fix subject-verb agreement and ensure every clause contains a complete main verb.