The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
Sample Response
The bar chartcolumn graph outlines the amount of leisure timenumber of leisure hours enjoyed by males and females in a typical week in 1998-1999, according to genderaccording to the gender and employment status.
In short, men enjoyed more free time for leisure compared to their female counterparts.
Turning to the detailsNow turning back to the details, men with full-time jobs had around fifty hours of leisure, whereas women had just thirty-seven hours. No figures for male partpaet-time workers are given, but part-time female employeespart-time employed females had fortyfourty hours of free time each week, whicheach week which is only slightlyslighty more than the women in full-time employmentwomen with full-time work.
Unemployed and retired males and females enjoyed more leisure time than their employed counterparts. However, in both categories, men had more leisure timeleisure time to enjoy than womenfemales. Such men had eighty hours of free time per week compared to ten hours fewer leisure hours by females.
Lastly, housewives enjoyed approximately fifty hoursfifty-four hours of leisure per weekleisure in a week during the given period and no data for househusbands werewas given.
DeleteWrite a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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Why this response received Band 6.0
The report is well organised by employment group and clearly conveys that men had more leisure wherever both sexes were shown. Its main weakness is data accuracy: several figures are overstated, including full-time men, unemployed and retired groups, and housewives, while copied task text appears at the end; the highest-priority improvement is to remove that material and verify every reported value against the bars.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All employment groups are addressed and a relevant gender overview is given, but multiple approximate values do not match the chart and the appended task wording adds no achievement.
Report the bars more accurately, including about 45 hours for full-time men, roughly 85 and 78 for unemployed people, and 50 for housewives.
Coherence and Cohesion
Distinct paragraphs create a clear progression from the overview through employed, non-employed, and housewife groups, though the copied prompt ending disrupts the report.
Delete the appended task instruction and retain a clean introduction, overview, and two grouped detail paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The response has sufficient vocabulary for comparison, but repetition and spelling errors such as "paet-time," "fourty," and "slighty" reduce control.
Proofread high-frequency task terms and use concise comparison phrases such as "slightly higher than" and "around seven hours fewer."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence structures are varied and mostly accurate, with occasional awkward comparative forms and article use that do not impede meaning.
Refine comparative constructions, for example "women had about seven fewer hours than men," and check articles before employment categories.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
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