The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Sample Response
The line graph illustrates changes indescribes data about the number of people working in four sectors of the economyeconomic market in the US from 1960 to 2020. Overall, the number of jobs in retail and healthcare saw a significant rise, whereas a decline could be seen in the number of jobs in agriculture and manufacturing. The manufacturing sector of the economysectors of economy accounted for the highest number of jobs (15 million)had the most people at the beginning of the period, but the retail and healthcare sectors hadretail and healthcare sectors had the largest number of jobs by the end. Moreover, agriculture replacedreplaces healthcare as the sector with the lowestleast number of jobs. Looking first at the upward trends, employment inThere was a significant increase in the number of jobs in retail over the 60-year period, fromin retail over the 60 years from about 6 million to 16 million. In addition, the number of jobs in healthcare also markedly grew over the same period, from approximately 2 million to 16 millionat the same time between approximately 2 million and 16 million. A significant increase could be seen in the number of jobs in manufacturing reached 20 million in the first 20 years, after which it declined steadily to around 13 million by 2020steeply dropped from 1980 to 2020. Furthermore, there was a gradual overall declinegentle but substantial fall in the number of jobs in agriculture over the 60-year periodin agriculture in the 60 years and finally reachedreach roughly 2 million, down from 6 million in 1960roughly 2 million.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear and accurate overview of the main trends alongside well-selected key features from the line graph. Ideas are organized logically with coherent paragraphing, making the reporting easy to follow. To raise the overall quality, ensure complex sentence structures are grammatical and avoid minor preposition errors when describing numerical ranges.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key trends and major features are correctly identified and supported with accurate numerical data from the visual prompt.
Refine overview wording slightly to clearly state that agriculture became the sector with the fewest jobs by the end of the period.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically grouped into paragraphs separating upward and downward trends, using clear transitional phrases.
Vary sentence openers across paragraph sections to make cohesive progression feel even more natural.
Lexical Resource
A good range of trend vocabulary is used effectively, though preposition choices are occasionally inaccurate.
Use correct prepositions when describing changes from one figure to another, preferring 'from... to...' over 'between... and...'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a variety of structure types, but noticeable grammatical errors occur in complex clauses and verb tenses.
Proofread complex sentences to ensure main verbs and subordinate clauses connect without run-on structures or tense shifts.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
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